I wanted; wanted
To take away all our pain,
To free you from your aches,
To envelope you in my embrace,
To make you forget all that can’t be erased.
I wanted; wanted
To kiss all your tears,
To chase away all your fears,
To taste all your wounds,
To chaperone you to the tombs.
I wanted; wanted
To cure you of your grief,
To surcease all your strife,
To heal your body, your soul,
To be your cure, an antidote.
I wanted; wanted
To give you all my happiness,
To bestow you only with blissfulness,
To free you of the enchains,
To liberate you, of all the restrains.
And in doing so,
I lost my exulted ecstasy,
My humorous joviality,
My peace, my calm,
My tranquility, the only charm.
And in doing so,
I reached someplace called inferno,
Burning, writhing, for how long I don’t know.
In healing you, I lost myself,
My body, my soul,
And there was left, no antidote.
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Sometimes, I wonder though, if at all this is possible. You always wanted everything to fall in place for the other person, you always wanted peace and serenity for them, but in trying to do everything for them, can you really lose yourself? In doing something good for others can you really hurt yourself? Can you really torture and enchain yourself, so, so badly that you fear your presence? Can you really fall to some place so dark?
Loved it..
Very well written, Moushmi
And I think we somewhere forget ourselves for others…and this is ok to some extent…but after that… it’s NOT at all ok..
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Yes some people and some relationships are like Dementors – they suck you dry of happiness while you give, give, give. I identify so much with this poem. Lovely!
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Thank you so much dear.
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Welcome sweets!
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Except Dementors do so on purpose… I think a lot of people do so from a place of real pain. We still have to be careful around them, lest we get sucked down, too.
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that’s right, although I have come across some sad, twisted people who do it only for ulterior motives too. Staying away from such people is your sanest choice.
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I agree 🙂
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Beautiful poem.. ! nd yes .. people do lose themselves in love.
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Thanks a lot dear. I agree sometimes love does lead us someplace, unwanted.
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A big yes to your question Moushumi. Unfortunately some people and relationships do that to you.
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Which leads to a real dark place!
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I saw a movie in which Robin Williams played a character whose wife committed suicide so he had to follow her into hell. Unfortunately, it’s message in the end was more romantic than real.
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Wow beautiful lines and you call my poem good 🙈🙈
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Yes, I still call them good 🙂
Thanks a a lot Shalini, however I have changed my own opinion about this poem. Do read my latest post.
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I guess when the love is pure there may be differences but in the end you will grow only, you both will sit together even if its dark till you embrace the light in each other. So may be we just need to wait till then.And yes a great post (with no offence its purely my opinion)
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This all applies when the love is real. When it’s true there is no fear, only setbacks which are always won. But when it’s deception, no matter how much you try, you lose it..
Thanks a lot Aditi, for your view, no offence was taken. 🙂
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Fair point well made as always moushmi😊
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😀
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I would dispute the notion of love ever being pure, rather it is an alloy of selfish desires and inspired friendship. The older I get, the more I think the ancient Greeks were right that friendship was superior to Eros, but I also think true love is the best of both.
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Oh, yes.
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🙂
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So lovely.. ❤️
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Thank you 🙂
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Welcome Dear.
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Amazing poem !
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Thank you so much.
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Self compassion and self care is very important to be able to give all that we can give someone. Otherwise your question could become a reality.
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I have been thinking about this very thing, so much, since I posted this yesterday and finally I decided I did not like how I ended this poetry. I hated my own work, leaving myself and my readers without hope, which lead me to change it’s ending. Do let me know if you like the old or the new version.
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I responded on your new version 🙂
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You can’t help someone who is drowning if you don’t keep up your own strength as a swimmer.
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sometimes we give up so much of ourselves in a relationship (any type including work etc.) we just burn ourselves up and become nothing but ash because we dont get back what we may need to stay whole. whether it is by choice or just by chance that we dont get what is needed.
good write
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I agree with you buddy, sometimes, these relationships are just not satisfying.
And so, I was not satisfied of how I ended this yesterday, and thinking about it much I tried changing it too.
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Now I can relate this to your past
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While you know nothing of my past!
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Haha..but I know the incident which I can relate to this
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You don’t know the incident!!
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Hmmm..if you say soo..bit from the way you kept your posts I have decided
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Okay, you might have decoded something, but it may or may not be the truth :-p
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Decoded
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People have to work through their own pain. All you can do is be there for them.
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Thank you. I appreciate your views 🙂
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It is so beautifully written. I so love this. I saw you posted another version. Let me read that too
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Thank you so much Shantanu.
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My pleasure always
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Amazing write… And yes, it is possible that one can loose themselves at the cost of other’s happiness. Yes one can end up hurting themself trying to keep the smile on the other persons face… True, ppl of such kind too do exist.
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Thank you so much for this wonderful comment. I agree with you, these people do exist, but in the process, they end up hurting themselves.
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LOVE!!
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Thanks.
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May be it so happens when you keep giving yourself to someone, every bit of you, you lose yourself in the process, you lose the individual you were. And when the other person vanishes your lose your crux and everything becomes disoriented. I could relate to every line you wrote.
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You are absolutely right!! 100%. In that process you sometimes do lose your crux.
Having said that, and agreed to my own poem, I did somehow find the end, dissatisfying, and without hope, for which I altered the end, in my next post.
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I will read it. 🙂
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Awesome poetry and yes sometimes u can really fall into the pits with a relationship and sometimes it is so beautiful. I loved these real words.
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